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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
» You should write at least 150 words.
Answer of Number of Mobile Phones and Landlines per 100 People
As is observed, mobile phones are more popular among European regions while the opposite is true for American regions.
Most European countries have high mobile phone use. The biggest users of mobile phones are the Italians, with 88 cell phones per 100 people. For example, Italy has twice as many mobile phones as landlines, with 88 mobiles per hundred people compared to 45 for landlines. Mobile phone use is low in Canada, with fewer than 40 phones per 100 people. Denmark is also unusual because it has slightly more landlines than mobile phones.
However, in some countries, the number of landlines is higher than the number of mobile phones. One example is the USA, where the number of mobiles, at 50 per 100 people, is much lower than the number of landlines, at almost 70 per hundred.
A similar pattern can be seen in Canada. The highest number of landlines in the graph is in Denmark, with about 90 per 100 people. In contrast, the lowest ﬁgures for ﬁxed lines are in Italy and the UK. In conclusion, it seems that mobile phone use is higher in Europe than in North America.
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Examiner’s Touch upon Number of mobile phones and landlines :-
This essay achieves Band 7.5 as a result of its flow, development, readability, built and outline of the important information.
THERE IS NO INTRODUCTION SENTENCE
The overview assertion provides enough concept to show trends and correlation between two users. (more popular among European, regions while the opposite is true)
Candidates starts the body paragraph by trend analysis (Most European countries have high mobile phone use). Then provides a sequence of chosen figures to indicate the comparability .
He introduces the exception with ‘However’ after which explains the exception, giving chosen figures to explain it and presents how it is totally different.
The abstract has a concise description of the trends and the exception, with no unnecessary element.
The candidate makes use of a wide range of language (eg it seems that, twice as many) and uses the ‘before + -ing’ and other constructions very successfully with varied and error free grammatical structure. Mix of sentence structures (Simple, Compound, and Complex) is used to explain the data along with pre-fabrications(as is observed), adverbs (slightly more) and adjectives.
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